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Rachel, I loved the complex relationships between the characters in your story! Lovette and her sisters are in a precarious position that makes it hard to foster a stable relationship. The relationship between Linus and Evelyn was also intriguing, though the character of Linus itself was very grabbing to me. The way you characterize your characters is really well done. The descriptions of the step-mother were particularly resonant to me, particularly the sections on how she is dressed, the way…

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I haven’t written fiction in a really long time, but it has been such a fun challenge for me to step back into it. I really resonated with all the discussions we had in class about raising the stakes and tension, making complicated characters, and making settings feel like real places. In my own writing, I am eager to take my peer’s feedback and adapt it to make something new and better than my original drafts for both my first…

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Coco, This was such a gripping read; Once I picked it up to read, I didn’t want to put it down. There was a lot I loved about your piece, but the metaphors and tone by far were really strong to me. I loved the way that the narrator spoke about Tatiana and their brief relationship. I could feel the desperation at the end of each passage. The tension felt consistent and well balanced throughout. I did find myself wondering…

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Malachi, This is the story of a man escaping his family, and finding a new one, by working on a fishing boat. I thought this story was really gripping, and I really enjoyed particularly the imagery of the boat and the work that was conducted on it. I loved the perspective of this story. It worked really well to me, especially considering the end and the internal struggles of the greenhorn’s both guilt and regret for leaving, but affirmation that…

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Mya,  I really liked your story! This is the story of a diner waitress who dreams of exploring more of what the world has to offer. I loved the imagery in the diner scene itself. I also loved the character of Hal, and the description of him and the waitress’ routine. I had a very clear picture of them and their interactions and I was really invested to hear what he had to tell her. I thought the stranger was…

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Mackie: I really liked this story! There were a lot of things to love in here, including the really detailed descriptions of the setting (particularly the descriptions of the snow and storm), the dialogue, and the characters. The descriptions evoked a lot of imagery, and I had a pretty clear image of the isolated house that shivers with the cold storm. I loved the dialogue you included. The fight between the mother and daughter both at the start and midway…

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Short Story Draft 1: Bonnie “That’s it, I’m leaving.” Pulling her pink backpack printed with blue flowers from under her bed, my sister rips viciously though our room. A dandelion yellow sweatshirt, a pink pen with a fluffy pom-pom on the end, and a loaf of bread stolen from the kitchen after dinner. They get shoved unceremoniously in her bag along with a pair of socks. “Do you even care?” She sneers at me, her blonde hair looking even lighter…

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Daphne: This is such an engaging start to this story! I was so invested by the end of the story, I’m a sucker for good characters who feel real, which you did super well. The hyper specificity of the main character’s interests and life provide a lot of insight on the type of person they are. The same goes for the mother and the man at the grocery store. I like that you kept the mother’s location a mystery, it…

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